Showing posts with label The Eagle's Claw. Show all posts
Showing posts with label The Eagle's Claw. Show all posts

Thursday, May 25, 2017

The Art of the Hook

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Every scam artist in the world understands the value of “the hook.” And everyone worth his or her salt knows the art of throwing one. The hook is designed to snag the mark’s attention, make him thirst to know more, and to draw him into the scheme so the crook can steal his money.

Every writer, whether composing fiction or non-fiction, must do the same. The hook catches the reader’s attention, makes him want to know more, and—of course—buy a copy of the book.

To be effective, the hook must come early in the piece—just as it must come early in the scam. Otherwise, the reader will lose interest and toss the book aside.

In my The Zozobra Incident, the hook is a white Impala coming down La Bajada south of Santa Fe with a blue Mustang convertible closing on it fast to force the Chevy off the road. The Bisti Business opens with a red-tailed hawk diverting the attention of two men arguing in the Bisti/De-Na-Zin Wilderness, allowing one to slip behind the other and strangle him with a belt. The City of Rocks starts with a man stealing a specific duck from among a flock of hundreds. In The Lovely Pines, we see a silent figure emerge from a pine forest to force a hasp on a winery door and disappear inside, uncaring whether or not he tripped an alarm. The initial scene in my Abaddon’s Locusts shows two men looking at a naked, sleeping youth on a bed as they frankly discuss buying and selling him.

Donald T. Morgan’s The Eagle’s Claw opens with a dream sequence during which we understand something weird—possibly supernatural—is going on.

Mark Wildyr’s Cut Hand opens with: But for improvident fate, angry, boiling clouds would have unleashed nature’s cold fury upon this Yankee river valley the day he buried his ma and pa. Do we want to know more?

Local author Babs Langner’s new book, Murder in the Mall gives us but a single line: A witch entered the food court at the Cottonwood Mall. Who could possibly put that one down?

J. S Bodin’s new book, Orchid of the Night, begins with: Officer Andy Gomez fell to his knees. Uncontrollable heaves racked his entire being, his vomit landing on the moldy soggy carpet beneath him. Oh my Lord! What’s going on?

Mary Quinalty’s Mountaintop Milagro tells us: Devastated, I drove down the tree-lined boulevard toward my house. Albuquerque’s dust-laden desert wind pushed me along at what felt like gale force. How would I break my news?

Michele Buchanan makes us want to know more with her opening of Scota’s Harp: Students’ backpacks cluttered aisles as people scrambled for seats in the sold-out auditorium. Wow! A show featuring a rock star or a lecture? Surely not a lecture.

Steve Brewer lures us in with Jackie Nolan saw the smoke from miles away, a thick black column italicized by the ceaseless New Mexico wind, the opening for his latest novel, Homesick Blues.

I have cited only a few local authors, but check the books of all the big names, as well. Somewhere, early in the story you’ll find a hook. To be honest, we’re scammers, too. After all, aren’t we trying to pry something precious out of our readers? The price of a book? Absolutely. But also something much more valuable: their time and attention.

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That’s it until next week. Feel free to let me know what you think of the piece.

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As always, thank for being a reader.

Don


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Thursday, June 2, 2016

Prologues (Part 2)

As I noted in last week’s post, I am often asked why all of my books have prologues. I not only tried to explain that I use them to set the tone of the novels, but also provided two examples of Prologues by another Okie writer. Today, I’d like to present another approach by a second author with Oklahoma roots, Donald T. Morgan. Let’s get right into the Prologue to his THE EAGLE’S CLAW.
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Sleep brought a restless dream. Rather, it was the stitching together of a memory by the boy’s subconscious from scraps collected and then forgotten over the years. There was a man in the dream, a tall Indah with brown hair and sad, gray eyes. A small, tawny woman with long, black hair and a beautiful smile was in it, as well. The izdan, well past school age, yearned to be able to read and write. The man, who taught at the Indian school, helped her learn. They were together often. They talked and laughed and grew toward one another.
They left the reservation and were married in the white man’s way. The woman often returned to her mother’s wickiup, but the schoolteacher never came. This was good because a man gazing upon his mother-in-law risked blindness. The young wife blossomed with health and happiness and child. Strength and pride replaced the longing in the man’s eyes.
One day, more Indah brought a rodeo to the reservation. The Tinneh loved a rodeo. It was great fun to watch the gaunt, pale men flop around on bucking horses. Some of the People rode, too. The crowd cheered when a cowboy rolled in the dust, no matter he was white or tribesman.
Then a hush fell over the stands. A magnificent roan pranced into the arena. A devil horse with fire-eyes and a black mane writhing like a nest of serpents. Its great hooves struck sparks from the earth.
No one could ride him, hooted the rodeo hands. No one ever had. No one ever would. They offered the bribe of money to any who succeeded. The Apache men stirred restlessly, but advised by diyi—the shamans among them—they refused the challenge even though the prize was hefty.
One man stepped forward. The white man with gray eyes. A teacher didn’t make much money, and he had a family on the way. He would claim the reward.
Death stalked the arena. Evil corrupted the air. The cowboys’ flesh turned green from it. The roan danced in savage glee. The smell of horse sweat and manure and hot dogs and dust hung heavy over the crowd. Invisible owls screeched. Whippoorwills cried, and coyotes cackled.
From the uneasy safety of his dream, the boy watched the man mount the haughty horse. The chute gate flew open. The roan shot out, bucking and whirling in a frenzy. The Indah rode him! He rode the wicked beast.
Enraged by the humiliation, the roan flung himself against the fence. The man was hurt. His fingers loosened. The animal twisted savagely, and the rider fell. The demon horse wheeled.
The woman with the beautiful smile ran into the arena, waving her arms to turn the frothy beast away. The horse charged on, driven insane by talons of monster owls buried in his withers.
The man was dead. The dreamer thought the woman was, too, but she moved. Her body strained in birth even as she died.
And he knew he had seen himself born.

Many writing coaches advise authors to steer clear of dream sequences, but I think this one is very interesting. An examination of it tells us a lot about the book. We can assume the restless dreamer is the protagonist of the novel, and if that is true, we learn a great deal about him. He is a half-breed Apache who is likely being raised on the reservation by someone who is deeply immersed in the mystical side of life. We know the violence into which he was born and can only wonder if it continues throughout his life. The Prologue foretells a struggle for the boy’s soul ty two different cultures and hints from the wealth of mythology encapsulated in the dream that the advantage goes to his Apache heritage. We can anticipate that powerful medicine will be used to keep him on the reservation. But we also know the irrestible draw of the outside world.

It spiked my interest. The viewpoint? Well, it has to be omniscient because the wealth of details are far beyond a child’s capacity to take in, understand, or even dream. Thereafter, the book is told in the third person limited point of view.

Once again, I’d like to challenge you to study a prologue and try to determine what the author is trying to accomplish with it.
*****
Next week, we’ll take a look at some of my Prologues.

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Thursday, March 24, 2016

Another Guest Post: Donald T. Morgan’s THE EAGLE’S CLAW

How about that… two guest posts in two weeks. Does that mean I’m getting lazy? Probably not. When it comes to social media, I’ve always been lazy. At any rate, I asked another Albuquerque writer with Oklahoma roots to give us a little more of his New Mexico family saga, THE EAGLE’S CLAW, this week, and he complied with Chapter 2 of the book. In prior posts, the last one on December 7, 2015, Donald introduced us to Román Otero (who comes to be called Ro) and his grandmother, known as Cane-Woman. I continue to consider the old woman spooky, but her contemporaries are likely closer to the mark when they label her a witch. Chapter 2 introduces the other side of the equation, the Chandlers, a white family that owns a large ranch abutting the Edge of Mountain Apache Reservation where Ro and Cane-Woman live.

I recognize the post is longer than usual, but please see it to the end.
*****
THE EAGLE’S CLAW
By Donald T. Morgan
Chapter 2

La Ciudad de Terreon sprawled across its tight little valley like age rings on a pine stump. Rows of project homes spilled into older residential sections crammed with ill-fitting commercial zones. In turn, these crowded down on the narrow old-world streets of the original settlement.
Jim Chandler’s army surplus Jeep motored past the adobe church on the plaza and turned north on NM35. Once across the Rio Chacon—a tenuous trickle still known to the area’s indigenous people as Wandering Water—he left the town behind and soon breeched Snowflake Pass where the Chacon Range met the Capucha Spur.
Almost immediately, the highway entered the Edge of Mountain Apache Reservation and unraveled down the far side of the slope into a violence-ridden fissure known as the Canyon of Winds. The road straightened upon emerging from the gorge and dropped rapidly toward the desert where the rush of air turned hot.
Jim bore right at the beginning of a long curve five miles short of his J-Bar-C Ranch. He forsook pavement for the sandy hardpan to play tag with a thick column of dust raised by his spinning tires as the Jeep bounced forward over treacherous dunes to short-cut the road by half a mile. He regained the asphalt and raced north until a red-tiled, two story house came into view.
He turned east on a gravel drive and eased in beside a black Lincoln. Tall and heavy-framed, he was in his mid-thirties. He would one day likely tend to flesh, but hard work kept him at a trim two-ten. He got out of the Jeep and eyed the tires on the sedan as his wife stepped from the wide veranda. He was going to have to try to find some new ones. They were still hard to come by since the war.
“What took so long?” she asked.
“Stopped at the Cattleman’s Club. Why? What’s the matter?”
“It’s Paul. I’m going to dust his britches until he can’t sit a saddle for a week when he drags in. Before he rode off this morning, he promised to be back by three to mow the lawn.”
He glanced at his watch. Almost seven. That didn’t seem such a catastrophe, but Judith was no alarmist. He swept off his hat and ran fingers through thick, dark hair. “Paul can outride any twelve-year-old in the county, and Pedro would make straight for the corral if anything went wrong. Let’s face it, mowing the lawn’s not our son’s favorite pastime.”
She shook her head. “It was the lawn today or no movie tonight.”
Paul was something of an enigma to his father. His need for people seemed insatiable, yet he often wandered off alone. Giving in to his wife’s sense of urgency, Jim headed for the bunkhouse and gave instructions to his foreman, Chuck Griggs, to saddle Chigger and turn out the hands for a search.
As Jim entered the house for supplies, an unusually restrained Teresa met him at the door. He lifted his daughter and planted a kiss on her tanned cheek.
“Where’s Paul, Daddy?” Her eight-year-old voice lacked its customary fire.
“Goofing off somewhere. What say we give him a tanning when he comes in?”
That brought a half-hearted giggle. She delighted in getting her brother into trouble.
             Jim was rummaging the hall closet for his sheepskin and a jacket for Paul when he heard Judith calling. As he stepped out onto the veranda, the house was in deep shadow, although an invisible sun still touched the mountains. The earth cooled beneath an evening breeze.
He stared into the fading light at a horseman plodding slowly up the gravel driveway. It wasn’t Paul. The pony was a paint. Pedro was black. Eventually, the horse shuddered to a halt beside the veranda. Rider and mount made a scraggly pair. It was difficult to tell which was scrawnier, the flop-eared mare or the youngster on her bare back. The boy stared mutely, a lot of white showing around his pupils.
Jim cleared his throat. “What can I do for you, son?”
“Uh…does a blond-headed kid live here?” The rider fixed his gaze squarely on Jim’s boots. The mare lowered her head and began cropping grass.
“My son has blond hair. Why?”
“His pony fell down Blind Man’s Arroyo.” He pointed with his chin. “Not far.”
Judith gasped. “Is he hurt?”
The lad’s gaze flicked to her and quickly dropped away. “Leg. Broke it, maybe.”
“Can we get to him by truck or Jeep?”
Sudden interest lit the boy’s eyes, but he shook his head. “Horses.”
When Chuck rode up leading Jim’s stallion, the rancher said some reassuring words to Judith and a wide-eyed Teresa before climbing into the saddle. He led the way past the corral toward a gate between the ranch and the reservation that would save them an hour and a half of riding. The remaining daylight evaporated before they reached it. Once they passed onto the Edge of Mountain Reservation, Jim’s heartbeat picked up the rhythm of Chigger’s hooves until the strange calm that had settled over him wore thin. Then his pulse raced, making progress seem desperately slow. He rode with his shoulders tensed. His legs clutched the saddle. More to break the silence than anything else, he asked the youngster’s name.
“Román Otero.”
He repeated the name silently—ro-MAHN…o-TAIR-o.
The boy had said it wasn’t far, but that meant little. The ponies plodded onward. Jim’s uneasiness became pain. The night wind swept away his patience. Roman’s thin voice startled him, and he pulled up to see the boy pointing into a deep arroyo. A sliver of moon topped the eastern horizon and cast faint gray images. The black depths of the gully swallowed his flashlight’s beam.
“Paul!” His voice rolled across the night. “Hold on, son. We’re coming.”
While Chuck broke out a lantern, Jim followed Román over the edge of the abyss, half-climbing, half-falling down the soft wall of the ravine. He stood swaying at the bottom until his eyes adjusted to the deeper darkness. His flashlight’s beam settled on Paul lying nearby. He knelt at his son’s side. “How are you making it?”
“Leg…busted. Tried to jump. Pedro fell, Dad.”
“Okay, take it easy. We’ll have you fixed up in short order.”
“Water. Thinking about water all day. Water and sun and snakes.”
“Román, there’s a canteen on my saddle horn.”
The boy raced for the water, passing Chuck cursing his way over the side of the arroyo, laden with ropes and a portable ring of light. A low whinny pulled Jim’s attention down the wash. He motioned, and the foreman went to check the pony. When the canteen arrived, Paul snatched it and upended the container.
He took the canteen from his son as Chuck returned and shook his head. “You know what has to be done for the pony,” Jim said.
“P…Pedro?” The boy slumped back and nodded.
“Take care of it, Chuck.”
Jim slit the denim of Paul’s right pant leg from cuff to thigh. The break was between the ankle and knee. As he fashioned a splint from boards he’d brought, Paul cried out twice. Román hovered nearby to help where he could.
A rifle shot shattered the silence, dying in a chain of fading echoes down the length of the long ditch. Jim glanced at his son, grateful he was half out of it. “That’s the best I can do. Now, let’s get him out of here.”
Chuck appeared at his elbow with Paul’s gear. “Can’t get no horse down here, Jim.”
“We’ll have to lift him out. Give me a hand.”
He knelt in the dirt as Chuck held Paul in place while Román lashed the boy’s wrists together in a fireman’s carry: one arm over Jim’s right shoulder, the other under his left arm.
Chuck knotted a rope around Jim’s chest and disappeared with the lantern up the side of the arroyo leaving the pit darker than ever. The flashlight punched a feeble hole in the blackness as he handed it to Román. Moments later, Paul’s saddle bumped its way to the top at the end of a second rope. Finally, Chuck yelled that he was ready.
Jim lurched to his feet and braced himself. “Okay, take up the slack.” The rope grew taut. “Careful now.” He waddled awkwardly toward the embankment. The rope threatened to flatten him against the side. “Hold it!” The pressure eased. He found a foothold. “Okay.”
The tether tightened, and he began walking up the side of the ditch. Chuck paced him well, pulling steadily, yet giving him time to keep his equilibrium. Paul must have lost consciousness. The boy twisted to one side. His bound wrists pressed against Jim’s windpipe. He stood it as long as possible.
“Wait!” he managed to gasp. As he pulled his son higher on his back and drew fresh air into his burning lungs, the earth crumbled beneath his right boot. He cursed as he slammed against a protruding rock. His shoulder went numb. The bones in his neck creaked, but fear for Paul pushed pain from his mind.
Román, climbing at his side, grabbed Paul and kept his broken leg from harm. This quick effort threw the lad off balance. He clutched at a long root and seemed to hang in space for a moment before plunging back into the arroyo.
“Are you okay?” Jim found new footing.
“Okay,” a reedy voice answered from below.
He gave the word for Chuck to start hauling him up again. Progress was agonizing. He used his good arm to keep Paul from choking him. The right was only half-alive. Román caught up and stayed alongside until they crawled over the top. Jim rested a moment while a thousand needles danced over his arm as feeling and strength returned to his muscles.
After they lifted Paul into Chigger’s saddle, Jim mounted behind him. The rancher peered through the moonlight at the boy beside the stallion. Smooth, deeply shadowed skin, arched brows, and a sensitive mouth drawn into a firm line. Obviously from the reservation. Not a blood though. Too tall. About Paul’s age. Perhaps a little younger. Ten or eleven.
“If you hadn’t found my son, it might have been bad. We’ll take it from here, but you come back to the house tomorrow afternoon, okay?”
The youngster’s eyes stole up to examine him frankly for a second. Sensing revolt, Jim leaned over.
“You come tomorrow afternoon, or I’ll send someone to get you.”

*****
I loudly proclaim my love and admiration for New Mexico, and the opening of this chapter paints a great picture of the grandeur and diversity of the state. Donald’s novel, THE EAGLE’S CLAW, is self-published as an Amazon Kindle book. I hope this prompted your interest enough to go buy his book. After all, without readers, we aren’t real authors. So keep on reading.

Feel free to contact me at  dontravis21@gmail.com. Donald can be reached at dtm1332@aol.com.

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Thursday, December 17, 2015

More of THE EAGLE’S CLAW

A couple of weeks ago, another Albuquerque author, Donald T. Morgan, guest-posted the Prologue to his post-WWII family sage entitled THE EAGLE’S CLAW on this blog. If you recall, we were introduced to the protagonist, Román Otero (or Ro as he comes to be called) as an orphaned child growing up in his spooky grandmother’s wickiup on the Edge of Mountain Apache Reservation in New Mexico. (Well, she seems spooky to me.) We learn a little more about Ro and his grandmother (Cane-Woman) and their way of life in Chapter 1 of the book. Enjoy.

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THE EAGLE’S CLAW

By Donald T. Morgan

CHAPTER 1

After foraging what seemed half the reservation, Román came up with only six empties: three strawberry, two Grapette, and a Coke with a chip in it. If only someone would pay for the beer bottles littering the ground, he’d be full of food and candy all the time. Booze wasn’t allowed on the reservation, but that didn’t stop the bootleggers. He picked up a long-necked beer bottle and put an eye to the amber mouth. Pretty. He shoved his tongue into the opening and sucked noisily. It was as dry as Barranca Seca in June. He tossed the bottle aside.
The store in White Pine wasn’t open yet, so he played in the mud puddle beneath a faucet for a quarter of an hour before it occurred to him to wash his face and hands. When the place finally opened, he swapped the empties for a full bottle of strawberry. Like he figured, the man refused to pay for the nicked Coke bottle.
He collected his scrawny pony and rode deep into Dead Scout Canyon where the mare could graze while he nursed his drink. It was no longer cold, but he didn’t mind. Warm soda pop made him burp, and he liked to burp. The bubbly water filled an empty belly better than anything. And red strawberry was the best of all. A man would never be hungry if he could buy four bottles a day.
For no reason other than his thoughts were so bent, he belched loudly, once in each cardinal direction, beginning in the east as all things begin and proceeding as the hands of a white man’s clock move. The ritual complete, he drained the bottle and dropped it on a rock.
The noise flushed a woolly spider from beneath the flat stone. Román nudged the creature with his toe. It scooted sideways on eight hairy legs and then froze. Cane-Woman said that if you killed a spider, its relatives would try to kill you. And his grandmother knew about such things. He hesitated, his foot suspended above the tiny animal. Abruptly, he dropped his heel.
“The white man at the Agency did it. The one with fuzzy hair that’s falling out on top,” he lied to the dead spider and all its kin. For emphasis, he nodded in the direction of the Indian Affairs Office in the settlement. There. That should fool the spiders. They weren’t very smart.
When he began moving again, he sensed he was not alone in the canyon. The hair on the back of his neck and the faint clink of stone from the deep shadows told him so. In that moment, he felt a kinship with ancestors who lived when danger covered the earth like a blanket. He decided to stay…even though the image of a huge Grandfather Spider bent on revenge crawled across his mind.
After tying the mare to a piñon, he headed for an outcrop where he could hide. Maybe the presence was other than natural. For years, he’d listened to tales of the Mana, the Great-Power-Flooding-the-Universe, and of the ga’an, the Mountain Spirits of his grandmother’s winter stories. Everybody said Cane-Woman knew Eagle, and that he gave her great power, although Román wasn’t exactly sure how that worked. But things might not be the same anymore. Was this world the same as when the Old Way prevailed? He frowned as he recognized the words of Miss Marshall, his last year’s teacher. Did his mind belong to the Indah woman now?
The mare whinnied and danced at the end of her reins. Whatever shared the canyon was near. His eyes raked the tufa above him. He saw nothing that didn’t belong. Ashamed of cowering behind rocks, he rose and poked his head over the boulder. Below him, he saw his “presence.” No supernatural shared the canyon with him. It was only Clarence Wolf sneaking up on his pony. He didn’t like Clarence very much. A year older and almost twice Román’s size, Clare-Ass wasn’t just a Dumbo. He was a bully, to boot.
Feeling cheated his interloper was merely human—and an inferior one, at that—he scooped up a handful of stones and ran down the hill raining missiles upon his enemy. The bigger youngster retreated before the barrage to a more sheltered place. They settled down to throwing rocks at one another with only sporadic accuracy until the morning failed and his stomach began growling again. The sport gone from the half-serious game, he reclaimed the mare and wandered off, leaving his enemy to hurl obscenities at his back.
Abandoning the high canyon to his foe, Román ranged down from the Capuchas onto the edge of the desert. The noise in his gut grew stronger. Chewing a wad of sap from a wounded piñon provided a little relief. He eyed a colony of prairie dogs, but they were such wary little creatures he didn’t even unwind the slingshot tied around his waist.
He rode the mare down the steep side of Split Nose Gulch and came up out of the gully hungrier than ever. He reined in and listened. Had he heard something? No, it was just his head playing tricks on him. His head must be hungry, too.
Then from far away, so faint the wind must have whispered in his ear, he heard a voice. He scouted and found nothing. Perhaps the ga’an toyed with him. Or was it the One-Great-God-Who-Was-Three they talked about at the settlement church? Weird. Three was such a strange number. He preferred four. Four was good and natural. Four was the ritual number of his people.
There it was again. Closer now. A cry for help. He skirted a clump of juniper and cut the trail of a horse. Curiosity set him to following the tracks. The hoof prints made straight for Blind Man’s Arroyo, an enormous ditch snaking down the foothills that carried the spring runoff to the distant river. He dismounted, stepped to the brink, and peered over the edge.

*****

I like to feature the other Don’s book because he loves New Mexico just as I do. South central New Mexico is as much a protagonist in Eagle as Ro is. Besides, I like his cover.

Read, read, read! See you next week.

Don

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Thursday, November 26, 2015

A Guest Post: Donald T. Morgan’s THE EAGLE’S CLAW

I recently asked another Albuquerque author if he would be interested in doing a guest post on this blog. As a result, this week my readers will get a look at Donald T. Morgan’s ebook novel THE EAGLE’S CLAW. CLAW is the telling of the intertwined stories of two young Apaches – one a mixed-blood and the other a pure-blood – as they grow up on a reservation. The two come at life from very different perspectives in south central New Mexico in the aftermath of World War II. The prologue of CLAW takes a rather unusual approach to introducing us to Román Otero, the book’s protagonist. Read on.
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THE EAGLE’S CLAW
By Donald T. Morgan

PROLOGUE
The Edge of Mountain Apache Reservation, Southern New Mexico, June 1946

Sleep brought a restless dream. Rather, it was the stitching together of a memory by the boy’s subconscious from scraps collected and then forgotten over the years. There was a man in the dream, a tall Indah with brown hair and sad, gray eyes. A small, tawny woman with long, black hair and a beautiful smile was in it, as well. The izdan, well past school age, yearned to be able to read and write. The man, who taught at the Indian school, helped her learn. They were together often. They talked and laughed and grew toward one another.
They left the reservation and were married in the white man’s way. The woman often returned to her mother’s wickiup, but the schoolteacher never came. This was good because a man gazing upon his mother-in-law risked blindness. The young wife blossomed with health and happiness and child. Strength and pride replaced the longing in the man’s eyes.
One day, more Indah brought a rodeo to the reservation. The Tinneh loved a rodeo. It was great fun to watch the gaunt, pale men flop around on bucking horses. Some of the People rode, too. The crowd cheered when a cowboy rolled in the dust, no matter he was white or tribesman.
Then a hush fell over the stands. A magnificent roan pranced into the arena. A devil horse with fire-eyes and a black mane writhing like a nest of serpents. Its great hooves struck sparks from the earth.
No one could ride him, hooted the rodeo hands. No one ever had. No one ever would. They offered the bribe of money to any who succeeded. The Apache men stirred restlessly, but advised by diyi—the shamans among them—they refused the challenge even though the prize was hefty.
One man stepped forward. The white man with gray eyes. A teacher didn’t make much money, and he had a family on the way. He would claim the reward.
Death stalked the arena. Evil corrupted the air. The cowboys’ flesh turned green from it. The roan danced in savage glee. The smell of horse sweat and manure and hot dogs and dust hung heavy over the crowd. Invisible owls screeched. Whippoorwills cried, and coyotes cackled.
From the uneasy safety of his dream, the boy watched the man mount the haughty horse. The chute gate flew open. The roan shot out, bucking and whirling in a frenzy. The Indah rode him! He rode the wicked beast.
Enraged by the humiliation, the roan flung himself against the fence. The man was hurt. His fingers loosened. The animal twisted savagely, and the rider fell. The demon horse wheeled.
The woman with the beautiful smile ran into the arena, waving her arms to turn the frothy beast away. The horse charged on, driven insane by talons of monster owls buried in his withers.
The man was dead. The dreamer thought the woman was, too, but she moved. Her body strained in birth even as she died.
      And he knew he had seen himself born.
*****

I have always been warned away from dream sequences to open a book, but I think this one works, don’t you? The novel weaves an interesting tale as it follows the orphaned Ro’s upbringing in an old-fashioned wickiup, overseen by a reclusive grandmother with the reputation of a witch. Jose Peyote, who thought himself emancipated through service in the US Marine Corps during the war, runs into another set of problems.

I hope you’ll be motivated to buy the Kindle book and read it for yourself.

As always, I’m interested in your reactions. Thanks for reading.


Don


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Thursday, July 16, 2015

A Guest Post: THE EAGLE'S CLAW by Donald T. Morgan

On rare occasions, I've had guest blogs, and today we have another. Donald T. Morgan, another Albuquerque author has published an Ebook on Kindle. I liked the story and the writing, so I asked if I could publish the Prologue to the novel as my post this week. He agreed, and the following is the result:
*****
THE EAGLE’S CLAW
By Donald T Morgan
PROLOGUE
The Edge of Mountain Apache Reservation, Southern New Mexico, June 1946

Sleep brought a restless dream. Rather, it was the stitching together of a memory by the boy’s subconscious from scraps collected and then forgotten over the years. There was a man in the dream, a tall Indah with brown hair and sad, gray eyes. A small, tawny woman with long, black hair and a beautiful smile was in it, as well. The izdan, well past school age, yearned to be able to read and write. The man, who taught at the Indian school, helped her learn. They were together often. They talked and laughed and grew toward one another.
They left the reservation and were married in the white man’s way. The woman often returned to her mother’s wickiup, but the schoolteacher never came. This was good because a man gazing upon his mother-in-law risked blindness. The young wife blossomed with health and happiness and child. Strength and pride replaced the longing in the man’s eyes.
One day, more Indah brought a rodeo to the reservation. The Tinneh loved a rodeo. It was great fun to watch the gaunt, pale men flop around on bucking horses. Some of the People rode, too. The crowd cheered whenever a cowboy rolled in the dust, no matter he was white or tribesman.
Then a hush fell over the stands. A magnificent roan pranced into the arena. A devil horse with fire-eyes and a black mane writhing like a nest of serpents. Its great hooves struck sparks from the earth.
No one could ride him, hooted the rodeo hands. No one ever had. No one ever would. They offered the bribe of money to any who succeeded. The Apache men stirred restlessly, but advised by diyi—the shamans among them—they refused the challenge even though the prize was hefty.
One man stepped forward. The white man with gray eyes. A teacher didn’t make much money, and he had a family on the way. He would claim the reward.
Death stalked the arena. Evil corrupted the air. The cowboys’ flesh turned green from it. The roan danced in savage glee. The smell of horse sweat and manure and hot dogs and dust hung heavy over the crowd. Invisible owls screeched. Whippoorwills cried, and coyotes cackled.
From the uneasy safety of his dream, the boy watched the man mount the haughty horse. The chute gate flew open. The roan shot out, bucking and whirling in a frenzy. The Indah rode him! He rode the wicked beast.
Enraged by the humiliation, the roan flung himself against the fence. The man was hurt. His fingers loosened. The animal twisted savagely, and the rider fell. The demon horse wheeled.
The woman with the beautiful smile ran into the arena, waving her arms to turn the frothy beast away. The horse charged on, driven insane by talons of monster owls buried in his withers.
The man was dead. The dreamer thought the woman was, too, but she moved. Her body strained in birth even as she died.
            And he knew he had seen himself born.
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I was struck by Don's Prologue because I've always been told dreams are a no-no, especially to open a book with one. But I think this one works well to set the tone for the story. Hope you'll check out the book, and perhaps buy a copy. As yet, it is only available as an Ebook. 
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